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AK47isthetool's avatar

"It took almost fifteen minutes to shove the dead weight into the Seville’s trunk."

There is no way this is going to end well for Myra. Still surprised. Well done!

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April's avatar

Part two was fun to write but I won’t give any spoilers.

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Amelius Moss's avatar

Oh dear!

I do trust the Leaper wasn't damaged.

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DataDriven's avatar

So far, this is a great read! Jack, as someone who doesn't put a book I start reading down, waiting a week sucks! You turning into the Amazon Prime for SubStack??

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LyriqalGangster's avatar

Enjoyed this, and read your first two submissions for the first time too. Can’t wait for the second half!

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April's avatar

Thank you for immersing yourself in my little noir world. Hope you enjoy part two. Oh, and make sure you read the Garland Fiske story as well.

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unsafe release's avatar

Nice work!

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G Jetson's avatar

This is very enjoyable. Set in reality, with unexpected twists as it turns darker. It really kept me interested in every word.

I like yellow cars, and you can't beat a large trunk to help deal with life's surprises.

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April's avatar

I wanted to write a story where, what can go wrong, will go wrong.

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-Nate's avatar

Bravo ! .

This could be another story of broken glass and broken dreams .

-Nate

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Speed's avatar

>gets shot with a weak ass nambu

>lives

serves her right for not packing a fuddy five and knocking the soul out of his body

"what, was he? Mexican? black?"

based

"Back in the old days, before they finished the 101, you would get a hit from the bottle in the detective’s desk and a commendation."

i like bill.

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