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Tom Klockau's avatar

Excellent!

Acd's avatar

April’s stories need to be made into movies, we could use some more good neo-noir and fewer superhero sequels.

April's avatar

Amen, get Quentin on the line.

Speed's avatar

write a scene where hes a background character licking her feet and hell do it

Speed's avatar

>gets shot with a weak ass nambu

>lives

serves her right for not packing a fuddy five and knocking the soul out of his body

"what, was he? Mexican? black?"

based

"Back in the old days, before they finished the 101, you would get a hit from the bottle in the detective’s desk and a commendation."

i like bill.

April's avatar

I wanted to give Myra the moral quandary of not quote killing him the first time, hence the Nambu.

Speed's avatar

that gun is chambered in thoughts and prayers

Donkey Konger's avatar

LMAO

Henry C.'s avatar

Location, location, location.

AK47isthetool's avatar

"It took almost fifteen minutes to shove the dead weight into the Seville’s trunk."

There is no way this is going to end well for Myra. Still surprised. Well done!

April's avatar

Part two was fun to write but I won’t give any spoilers.

Amelius Moss's avatar

Oh dear!

I do trust the Leaper wasn't damaged.

April's avatar
Sep 5Edited

No Jaguars were harmed in this work of fiction. The leaper strikes me (see what I did there) as a deadly blunt object.

Henry C.'s avatar

Deadly? YOU SAID NO SPOILERS

Ice Age's avatar

This is why I like superhero stories so much. They don't shine harsh fluorescent light on the weaknesses, inadequacies and failures of real people the way stuff like this does.

April's avatar

I’ll take that as a compliment ;)

Henry C.'s avatar

This should be read with an Old Fashioned in hand.

April's avatar

put two cocktail cherries in mine, I skipped breakfast

sgeffe's avatar

I’ll drink to that! 🥃

I’ll drink to anything! 😂

Luxardo cherries are the best!

LyriqalGenius's avatar

Enjoyed this, and read your first two submissions for the first time too. Can’t wait for the second half!

April's avatar

Thank you for immersing yourself in my little noir world. Hope you enjoy part two. Oh, and make sure you read the Garland Fiske story as well.

LyriqalGenius's avatar

Finally had time to read it, also well done!

April's avatar

Thank you!

DataDriven's avatar

So far, this is a great read! Jack, as someone who doesn't put a book I start reading down, waiting a week sucks! You turning into the Amazon Prime for SubStack??

Peter Collins's avatar

The "popular demand" is not wrong. Brava April!

April's avatar

Thank you, Peter!

tcl  56's avatar

Well done, looking forward to part 2!

Resourceful female fighting through difficult circumstances - excellent reading for those of us who still remember and identify with Ivanhoe... Keep writing!

April's avatar

Bill is a knight errant whether he likes it or not

linearphase's avatar

Terrific! Started out nice and slow then went really sideways quickly!

Joe's avatar

Always liked these little Caddies.

Real friends just help you dig the hole…

April's avatar

This has got to be the first time ever a 86 Seville was the “hero” car in the history of any creative endeavour.

Joe's avatar

Welp, it’s not a Cimmaron😆

sgeffe's avatar

@Speed, would “based” be an appropriate reaction here?!

Wyatt LCB's avatar

yes

Speed's avatar

no

also there really should be a way to @ people here

unsafe release's avatar

Nice work!

G Jetson's avatar

This is very enjoyable. Set in reality, with unexpected twists as it turns darker. It really kept me interested in every word.

I like yellow cars, and you can't beat a large trunk to help deal with life's surprises.

April's avatar

I wanted to write a story where, what can go wrong, will go wrong.

Crabspirits's avatar

Ugggh. Now she’s gonna have to pay that guy for services rendered. So frustrating reading about someone not able to kill a man, or even dispose of the body properly…I mean, theoretically…

sgeffe's avatar

What would YOU do as a 1986 Seville story?

Or HAD you done one? I remember the yellow De Ville one vaguely—old lady owner going to a K-Mart, but I don’t recall how she met her demise.

April's avatar
Sep 7Edited

A yellow Eldorado makes a cameo in the next LA story but it isn’t the star of the show. Murder, old Hollywood and a missing notebook.

Crabspirits's avatar

Probably something similar to the saga of Herb and Grace in their imperial

sgeffe's avatar

I recall that was a last Imperial on the Dynasty/New Yorker platform. But I don’t recall the details. Herb pulled out of the early bird buffet and got T-boned by something enough to take both out, perhaps?

April's avatar

I kind of like those fwd Imperials but would like to have my old 75 LeBaron coupe back.